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Sarai
Sassy Cerulean Sarai. "So wherry wherry sowwie"

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Yep, Mindchamber owns.

So do you :3

Thank you kindly dear, any comments or criticism would be most welcome :)

I don't want to be that stereo-typical online guy thats hits on you...but I think I will be.

No thanks!

which such an inspirational poem such as that one to drive me, I'll definitely be finishing this picture now ^_^

great work Sarai

Thank you kindly as well :) I actually changed it a lot since you last read it, so do have a read again sometime :D

Pretty neat!

Thanks, hey... I posted a MP3 clip in a thread on Newgrounds, hehe. I found it hilarious.

For a rough draft, it looks very detailed in the end. Nice work!

It sounds more like a rhythmic autobiography or something like that, but I'm more interested in the sketch for obvious reasons.

Also, IF YOU'RE GONNA TAKE SIDES IN THIS WAR WITH THE HIPPY WITH THE CREEPY HAIR IT BETTER BE MINE

Right a book, sis!

'Writing now' :)

pretty good drawings here. do you do them yourself?

love some of your songs btw.

I'm afraid Mindchamber did it as I said above :)

Is that you in the banner? XD

Your poem was cool! And that's strange because I don't usually like to read poems :s

By the way... Do you think my username is nice? :)

I couldn't finish this.

It is, at best, nonsensical.

Who the hell is this Chao person? What kind of name is that? No, I shouldn't ask, because to be totally honest, I don't care. You haven't done a damned thing to make me WANT to finish this, you just shoved me into the action. The odd order in whih most of your sentences are structured doesn't much help, either.

Please, make your voice understood before you make it known.

Your whole comments imply your lack of English ability, cultural understanding and so forth. Chao is a Chinese name, nice going on coming across as a racist, or at least ignorant.

If you read a lot of poetry you'd note that poetry is comprised of things like rhythem and construct. Every stanza can be written a different way and the order of words can be used to direct someones' mind as they read it.

I will review the order above and see if there are any unwieldy sentences I can restructure, that might be your only valid contribution ;-)

Mindchamber said it right. A truly inspirational poem. All that time spent typing well was well worth it.

Keep up the good work.

Nice poem. Pretty rhythmic.

I went to an art college...and the instructors would get pissed everytime I drew like that.

All in all a bit angsty.. But is really well-written. :) I truly enjoyed reading this, painted a breath-taking vision on my mind. I'd love to see more in the future. :)

Damn.
Thats deep.
I don't have a good eye for poetry, but thats something to put in a book.
Such a sad story of misery, betrayal, memory and more misery, really makes you want to put it in a book somewhere.

The selection of words were pristine for the mood, putting a vague, but soul-deep image into the situation, its the kind of poem, you'd have to read again, as the individual parts coincide with each other at a later or earlier point.
Acceptance is a cruel skill when harbingers of death come your way.
Nice work.
A rough sketch inspired all this...
You're deep, girl.
No pun intended.

deep..that was just deep kinda got lost there.
nice job i like the poem.